Feed the Lake

Your story started off well, and then went south.  You can do better. 

My professor in the graduate writing workshop at the University of Arizona waited through a few tepid comments about my first story: some good images, a few funny lines, a sort of intriguing female protagonist, and then he weighed in:  “I don’t think there’s much else to say about this piece.  Let’s move on.”

Gulp.

At break, having just experienced the embarrassment of hearing my story—my very first story ever submitted to my very first writing workshop—was not even worthy of discussion, I slunk out of the room.  I knew no one in the program.  I’d transferred in midyear.  Literally, people were avoiding me, separating to make room on my way to the bathroom where I splashed water on my face, stared in the mirror, and considered jumping out the third-floor window, if only I could be certain it would do more than cripple me.  I wasn’t sure I could go back into that classroom.  Wasn’t this the very thing I dreaded?  Public humiliation?  Destructive criticism?  Oh, wait, there was no criticism.  The story hadn’t been worthwhile enough to warrant any.

A young man in wire-frame glasses came into the bathroom.  He was one of my fellow workshop members.  “I’m Rick,” he said.  “I liked your story.”

Surely he jested.  “Is it always like this?”  I asked.

“Sometimes worse.  I wouldn’t take it too seriously.  You’ll get used to it.”

“I feel like putting a gun to my head.”

“I’ve done that,” he said.  I gaped at him.  “Just to see what it feels like.  I wasn’t serious.  Though I do know a woman who took her novel manuscript outside, roped it to a tree, and shot it six times with a forty-five.  She had some other issues too.  Anyway, you’ll survive.  We all do.  Have you ever been to Alaska?” he asked.

My story had been set there.  “No,” I said.

“I didn’t think so.  Still . . . there’s something there.  Don’t give up on it.  You ready?”

I came back to class, and sat mute for the rest of the period, wondering if my face looked as red and hot as it felt.

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That was thirty years ago, and amazingly I’m still here.

So let’s be honest.  We’re not as weak and sensitive as we think. Otherwise we would have—make that I would have—given up long ago.

That day I went home from my workshop, told my girlfriend I’d made a mistake and that I didn’t belong in the program.  I’d been exposed.  Fortunately, she wouldn’t let me pack up the car and skip town, as I insisted.

I read over my professor’s comment: “Your story started off well, then went south.  You can do better.”  Was there any truth in it?  Not that I could see.  Or make that not that I could see at the moment because I couldn’t imagine what “do better” meant.  I’d given the story my all.  You can do better.  But how?  The problem was I worried I couldn’t.  As one of my classmates put it back then about his own writing, “I’m afraid I’ll knock and nobody will be home.”

But a year later, after I survived my initiation and had handed in a couple stories better received, I took out that first story, which might as well have had the mark of Cain on it for how cursed it felt, looked it over quickly, trashed all but the first three pages of the 15-page story, and with that brazen determination that writers need to slash and burn their way to the hidden heart of a story I rewrote it.  Two months later I sent the new version off, and miracle of miracles, it became my first publication in the not-too-shabby Antioch Review.  I’d learned the first really important precept of being a writer: you have to save yourself in this business—over and over and over again.

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So how’s that done.  Well, first let’s look at what you need to save yourself from.  Mostly, that’s yourself.  Your own fears and doubts.  And what form does this come in?  Make that forms, because fears and doubts keep transmuting into other fears and doubts.  For instance, you sit down at your desk, ready to work, and then you remember you haven’t watered the plants.  Back at your desk, just as you place your fingers on the keyboard, it occurs to you that you forgot to make a dental appointment for your youngest child.  That done—it took twenty minutes because they had you on hold—you finally clean the coffee stain up from two weeks ago on your desk and now you’re ready but it appears there’s a rain storm coming and you have to close all the windows and make sure the car windows aren’t open either even though it’s unlikely since the car is in the garage, but never mind, you check it anyway, and then there’s the little matter of the dead flies on your windowsill—how did they get there?  Here comes the dustbuster . . .vrooom . . .

You get the point.  This sort of procrastination can go on forever.  And let’s not even talk about Facebook, email, twitter, iTunes, Angry Birds, Words with Friends, not to mention looking up the ex-boyfriend on classmates.com.  To paraphrase, it’s the resistance, stupid.

It’s resistance because you’re afraid of failure; it’s resistance because you’re afraid of failing again; it’s resistance because you’re afraid of failing after finally succeeding—who wants to go back to what it felt like?  It’s resistance because you believe erroneously there is a correlation between your moods and the quality of writing you will produce when in fact there is no such connection, and you will never be in a good mood to write until you start writing.  It’s resistance because you’re a bad mother and should be devoting your precious time to your children; it’s resistance because you’re a bad father and should do more around the house so your wife won’t feel like a bad mother; it’s resistance because you could be making money at a real job.  In an essay called “Just Still Writing,” the author Ann Tyler talks about starting out as a writer while trying to raise a family.  Another mother asks her at the playground, “Have you found work yet?  Or are you still just writing.”

Yes. The “just writing syndrome.”  It’s resistance because of the dismissive way that people, and sometimes we, see ourselves in this literary vocation unless we happen to be making bundles of money writing a mega-commercial best seller.  It’s resistance because we should be getting in shape at the gym—or better shape.  After all, we know that working out equals x-amount of results.  But . . . what does writing equal?  Certainly not x-amount of results!  In fact, is there any other profession that takes such a gamble on productivity?  If you’re an electrician, chances are you reach a level of skill that you can count on.  Likewise for a doctor.  Even a musician gets his scales down.  But writing?  One day you write well, the next poorly.  Let’s revise that: one sentence you write masterfully, the next is so clunky that its verbosity could choke an entire city to death.  Talk about the uncertainty principle.  Writers live it every day.  No wonder we’re so full of resistance.

So what’s needed to endure?  Because I don’t know about you, but I plan on doing this until they carry me out or I start talking to invisible parakeets.  How exactly, I ask myself, have I kept going for more than thirty years in the face of all the obstacles?  I can tell you it’s not by having success.  I once thought that if only I published a story in a respected literary journal I’d feel like a “real writer.”  And then after that, my validation requirement was upped to publishing a book.  And then it was two books.  And then it was prizes.  And then it was . . . well, it doesn’t matter because all that happened and I still found myself feeling at times just as paralyzed as I did that first day in workshop when my story was axed.  There was a bad review, or a rejection on a new novel, or being dropped by an agent, or envy stopping me dead in my tracks.  It didn’t matter.  The point is that you don’t get to a place in this business where your confidence is so great that it outweighs your resistance.  You’re not grandfathered in so much that you never have doubts.

The antidote to this?  Besides perhaps meditation, anti-depressants, exercise, a supportive family who will indulge you within limits but remind you of your self worth outside of writing?  Reset yourself.

Get yourself to a place where you have no internet.  Short of that, turn off your internet by downloading the virtually free software program called Freedom that will do it for you.

Don't show anyone a draft until you’re ready.  They’re called drafts for a reason.  Your eyes and your eyes alone should be on that draft before someone becomes your audience.  When you’ve taken it as far as you can go, when you’re really finished incubating and know you need help to break the logjam, show it to someone you trust to be honest.

Write in the morning before you get self-conscious and your critical faculty runs amok with nasty little messages such as you can’t write a plot to save your life, your parents/friends/lovers will hate you for betraying them, you can’t write humor because the last time you tried your workshop members thought you were depressed.  That is, catch yourself off-guard by writing in your journal under the guise that the writing is only for you.  Performance anxiety goes away when you eliminate the audience.

Give yourself deadlines as if “you had a real job.”  Make yourself stick to them.  Pick someone, a friend or family member, to enforce and reward them.

Forget about your children, elderly parents, hungry spouse, demanding cats.  They don’t exist.

Accept loneliness.  Because you WILL be lonely.  But hear this: you’ll be lonelier if you don’t write.  When you’re not writing, you feel hollow inside, even when you’re surrounded by people.  Simply put, there’s the loneliness of the work, and the loneliness without it.  You have to endure one to overcome the other.

Realize that you’re writing even when you’re not.  It’s called wool gathering.  Lying on the couch daydreaming, mulling over a story in the shower, waiting to pick up your kids from school, spacing out in a staff meeting.  Give yourself credit for all these.

Stop for the day in the middle of a sentence.  Closure—completing a chapter is satisfying—but shuts the door for immediately rebooting your work the next day.

Keep multiple drafts going.  When you get stuck on one, switch to another.  Those drafts are gold; they may look like lead—or be leaden—but as with my experience on that first workshop story, taking out something again after time has passed will often be the right moment to make a breakthrough.  Expect to write ten or twenty times what you use.  Don’t be embarrassed about your obsessions—they’re your best allies in this endeavor.

Time, time.  Too much for a writer is as bad as too little.  When I quit teaching for a while and thought I’d be a full time writer, the pressure to produce, the urge to linger over every sentence, the self-consciousness of having my whole identity be WRITER smothered my drive, much like a hovering parent can stifle a child.  Every paragraph appeared to suffer from frog bloat.  At the other end—too little—you will need to stand up for time to write because writing—being puny by nature in its gestation stages—will constantly be pushed to the back of the bus otherwise.  And speaking of time, patience is fine but waiting is not.  That is, waiting to hear whether your story will be published, waiting for a call from an agent about your novel, waiting for results of a contest, waiting for your friend to finish reading a draft. Start something else immediately.  That’s all you can control.  Time will fly by.

Finally, figure out why you want to write in the first place and why, as the saying goes, you cannot not write.  For me, elusive and grandiose as it may have been, it was that I wanted create something of beauty that was somehow an answer to pain.  That’s still good enough to keep me going.

I’ll leave you with two quotations:  One is from Jean Rhys, who wrote The Wide Sargasso Sea:  “Listen to me.  I want to tell you something very important.  All of writing is a huge lake.  There are great rivers that feed the lake, like Tolstoy and Dostoyevsky.  And there are trickles like Jean Rhys.  All that matters is feeding the lake.  I don’t matter.  The lake matters.”

The other quotation is from my wife.  She has to repeat it fairly often, but it works: “Be nice to yourself, and keep writing.”

Friend me?

Hi, Jennillee!

First of all, I luv the ddoouubbllee spellings in your name!  So I’m applying to be your Facebook friend!  Perchance any openings?

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Jennillee! Thank YOU so MUCH for actually writing back to me.  I can’t tell you how rare that is.  Not that I do this often!  I’m not like a stalker or anything (and anyway, I’m a girl, so go figure). I do understand you have no availability.  I think when you say “At the present time, Jennillee has no available openings for friends” that’s pretty clear.  I’m just sort of wondering if I could send you some more cool data about myself, like my SAT scores or my haircut (a picture, I mean!).  Do you have a waiting list?

 *

Okay, sure, I get it, you STILL have no availability which is totally, totally cool :-) 

But look, maybe you’ll reconsider and hit the refresh button on your automatic reply if I tell you that I’m like really important on KLOUT.  Like I even got Bill Murray to tweet me before he passed away.  TINAL! (That is not a lie!).  So obviously I’m a person of influence and will RAISE your KLOUT score!  How 'bout hitting that 'confirm'?  Got to luv my chutzpop!

 *

I am attaching a list of my friends.  Maybe it’s that you don’t appreciate just how popular I am, but 3042 people can’t be wrong!  If you look at my profile, and I hope you will, consider two things: one, I’m not a crazy person.  Two . . . I forgot two.  But about being crazy, I knew Bill Murray hadn’t died but you have to admit that he looks like he wants to be dead in most of his movies.  

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I’m back!  I hope you won’t think I have trouble with boundary issues.  I’m just a super friendly person and know it would be really fun for both of us if you accepted my friend request.  Now I don’t want you to freak, but I noticed your friend count went down by one since last time I wrote.  I didn’t want to mention anything at first because it could just be a glitch and sometimes my number bobs up and down a little too.  Usually, I track down all 3042 friends to see who dropped me and I find the culprit (ha!), but I’m not like saying everybody does that.  Just as a favor, though, I did go through your list and compared it with the 424 pages of your friend list two days ago that I printed out and found the problem!  It was Royce McIntyre!  He sounds sort of Irish so maybe he has enough American friends!  I can’t imagine you’d drop him or any of your friends, but just in case you did (poor Royce!) that means you have one more opening because now you’re at 4999.  Color me Xcited!

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I looked up “cease and desist” orders and they’re for like crazy bill collectors and pesky time-share people who hound you until you bleed.  I don’t think you really meant to send me that message.  I just want to be friends.  Is that so bad?  If you really think it’s not a good idea, and you honestly don’t like my little challenge of asking you to guess what emoticon I’m going to send you on the half hour, I guess I can take a hint.  I’ll just wait for your reply because I know sometimes that in the heat of the moment I rush to conclusions too and make rash judgments that I really regret.  :-E (this means vampire! but don’t worry because I’m not really a vampire and going to suck your blood or anything!!!)

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 JUST FOUND OUT YOU CAN STILL SEND TELEGRAMS -(STOP)-GOT YOUR ADDRESS FROM A ‘FRIEND’-(STOP)-TEE HEE-(STOP)-STARTING MY OWN FRIEND SITE –(STOP)-SIGN UP?-(STOP)-WEB ADDRESS IS–(STOP)-WWW.FRIENDMEORELSE.COM –(STOP)-(STOP)-(STOP)-(STOP)- (STOP)-(STOP)- )-(STOP) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)

  

What Republicans Mean When They Say . . .

Taxes:  see ‘stealing’

Immigration: see ‘invasion’

Gay marriage: see ‘Book of Revelations’

Inequality: see 'Where?'

Moderate: see 'wuss' (urban dictionary).

Torture: see 'Where?'

The Dream Act: see 'Dreaming'

Women’s Reproductive Rights: see N/A

Climate Change: see Partly Cloudy With Chance of Rain.


UN: see Takeover


Takeover: see UN


Corporate Takeover: see Prosperity

The Right to Bear Arms: see 'immigration' above.

Budget: see 'tax shelter'

Fiscal Conservative: see 'Swiss Bank Account'

Deficit: see 'Public Employees'

Social Conscience: see 'The Dream Act'

To listen or to read?

I’ll admit it. I listen to books. But I also buy the hard copy and at some point, if I really love what I’m hearing I switch to the volume itself. I can’t help defaulting to the familiar and gratifying combination of holding what my eyes are seeing. How many times have I rested an open book against my chest and just sat there ruminating over a particularly rich or powerful passage. You can’t exactly do that with a Kindle—the hugging-the-book thing just doesn’t feel the same. As for listening, it’s not that great to keep hitting the rewind button and drifting off in a reverie while driving. Yet . . . what I’ve found by listening is the same thing that people claim who have bought Kindles or any other downloading device for books: I read (hear) far more than I would otherwise.

Not long ago an article appeared in The Atlantic (with a subsequent expansion into a book) called “Is Google Making Us Stupid?” The essential premise was that Google, and more generally the internet (aren’t they one in the same?), were ruining our attention spans. Fragmenting our ability to concentrate on longer tasks. For instance, those novels by George Eliot, once called “winter novels,” because they took a whole season to finish.

I don’t doubt the truth of this, because as the author pointed out from his own experience, he had just lost patience to devote to a massive classic. Breadth had replaced depth. Coverage not concentration had become the operable principal. In any internet reading, with all its embedded linkage, one naturally becomes a jumpy rabbit—by necessity. By checking out all those links you believe you’re actually gaining a more comprehensive view and not missing anything. Well, certainly sitting down and investing the time to read Moby Dick would make you think you’re missing something. Such dedication to a single book would drive a multi-tasker crazy. And the point is that we’ve all become more multi-taskers than concentrators. Surfing the internet—scanning—has become the means of not losing your place in the world. Quickness means you’re informed. Duration becomes a liability. Data replaces what used to be called knowledge.

So, given this, what hope is there for someone to spend his time reading Moby Dick or The Brothers Karamazov, two books that I now admit, alas, I did not read. I listened to all 25 and 35 hours respectively. Let’s put aside what this says about how much time I spend in my car. My main concern here is not whether I actually found a way to enforce my paying attention to these books that I otherwise would never have “read” (or reread), because I was too impatient or Googlized or tired and hyper to sit still without a windshield in front of me for that long. I’m interested in what is lost or gained in the transaction, just as what’s lost or gained in the transformation of any material from one medium to another: books to film or to plays, or these days from one “carrier” to another: iPod, iPad, Kindle, cellphone, PC, radio, and no doubt soon to be, hologram.

This all comes down to voice. I cannot, for instance, get over that despite my best efforts to be open, the reader of the audio book of Joyce’s Dubliners when doing Gretta’s voice in “The Dead” sounds like Robin Williams as Mrs. Doubtfire. Perhaps if I hadn’t read the story (and taught it) at least thirty times, I could be more generous. Part of the problem is that once you hear a voice in your head, that is, the voice as translated from the page to your ear by your own perception of the syntax, rhythm, and spatial layout, it’s hard not to resist the vocalizing as a false impersonation, especially if you’ve heard that voice so distinctly (think Scout in To Kill a Mockingbird or Holden in Catcher, to site two well-known narrators). There’s probably a good reason why Salinger never wanted Holden to appear on stage or screen and refused to sell the rights to the novel. But even then, when a book is made into a film or play it’s adapted, changed, and the actors have to flesh out a director’s vision of the characters and story. In hearing someone read a work verbatim, you have no modification, just that reader’s voice, and you either take to it or not. It can and often does grow on you. But it can also grate.

Jennifer’s Egan’s admirable novel, A Visit from the Good Squad, has a female reader for its entirety and its wide cast of characters. One can’t help but be taken by the character Sasha channeled in the opening chapter. Sasha, a kleptomaniac, finds the right combination of sultriness and vulnerability in the audio reader’s rendering of her. The male characters are another story; they sound too much alike and they sound too much like slackers or dudes with issues. What gives, say, Sasha mystery, subtlety, and allure becomes a deficit when the reader speaks on behalf of another character Benny, who in his dialogue cannot escape a whiny flatness that isn’t in the well-developed character himself. And therein lies the problem: reading to yourself you hear the repository of female or male voices long accumulated in your consciousness. Hearing that same character read to you, the voice is no longer being created by you in conjunction with the author: it’s the audio reader’s interpretation alone.

You might get the impression from these examples above that the problem is gender: female doing male parts, or males doing female ones. But I never got used to the celebrated Flo Gibson’s reading of James’ The Portrait of a Lady. I know I was supposed to find it masterful—Flo, who died recently, was known as the grande dame of audio recordings—but frankly I found it overweening, or maybe that was James himself.

In any case, the audio reader’s voice must be wrestled with a bit at first, especially to integrate it with the author's. Try reading your own work aloud if you want to get a sense of this (and catch mistakes and lumpy prose while you’re at it). You supplant as much as echo the sound already there with a different version of the intimate words you first heard in your own mind.

On the other hand, when it works, it’s simply lovely. I couldn’t get enough of the perfectly matched narrator and the audio reader in Margaret Atwood’s Blind Assassin. Here you have power and bitterness, yearning and resignation in the reader’s presentation, the reader in tune with the darker narrative but allowing just enough light in her voice to keep breath in the tale. Likewise, the reader of Ishiguro’s Never Let Me Go has a bit of English propriety in her voice, mixed with a dreaminess appropriate to a story of a clone created for her consumptive value in a futuristic society. And the reader of Marilyn Robinson’s novel Housekeeping tells the story with such a pitch-perfect combination of composure, retrospection and keen immediacy that you can easily juxtapose the simplicity of a sentence like “Lucille turned out the lights and we sat at the kitchen table, trying to name the states of the union” with a poetic nugget such as, “Bones, bones, I thought, in a fine sheath of Sunday gloves.”

It’s this very elasticity of voice, as in the last example, that the author must make work on the page but the audio reader must capture without either over dramatizing or missing nuance and subtlety. Resonance itself is a different animal when read than spoken, and the delicateness of that task, which authors tirelessly work at to convey without ruining its effect by being too obscure or direct, can so easily be pummeled by poor spoken expression. Rhythm on the page, for instance, is not just choosing a speed of speaking: commas and semicolons don’t translate so easily. They are the writer’s silent markings of pacing and thought. Sound unifies a work just as much as sense, perhaps even more so in a literary work where content is an equal partner with style, and the latter not just in the service of the former. Voice for a writer is more directly—and intimately—associated with interiority than exteriority. After all, a writer hears the sound of the words in her head when she puts them down and may never speak them aloud. And even when one gives a public reading of a work, the overlay is of this original and more subterranean expression that was first heard in the composing. As one writer has said, to know the voice is to follow a whisper

In a novel such as Extremely Loud and Incredibly Close the audio can’t reproduce the explosion of graphics, illustrations, and photographs: Oskar Black’s business card (inventor, jewelery designer, jewelry fabricator and fourteen other professions); the pages of colors in opposing colored ink; the single line of “I’m sorry” followed by “I’m still sorry” on the next page surrounded by a sea of white space; the interview format or the block paragraphing or the kinetic cluster of dialogue between Oskar and his therapist Dr. Fein; all the sheer inventive funness, and often sad presentation, of a crazy quilt of visuals, the most striking being the much-noted novel's end pages that can be flipped forward to move a falling body up the World Trade Center or backward to poignantly see it dropping down. In one sense, what Foer does with Extremely Loud is exploit the novel’s bookness, stretching the use of the printed page. The audio version meanwhile has three different readers for different character parts and does a fairly good job of doing the book justice. But you can’t both read this book and listen to it and not expect to have two different encounters. The textual innovations, the graphic elements create an even greater division between reading and listening, and one must almost make the choice of which experience you desire more, unless you’re willing (and have the time) to do both.

I for one have resigned myself to stop fighting the changing technology of the book and just embrace all its forms, drawing the line at any abridgment of the text—that is messing with the words themselves. In their nakedness, they remain supreme.

How to Give a Reading

Don’t look the first row in the eye; they have been forced to sit there because they got here late.

Don’t be disappointed by your host’s introduction, which has consisted entirely of reading from your book jacket.

Try not to drool on the microphone like last time.

Try not to think about that dream you had last night when you turned page after blank page of your manuscript until coming to the very last page that had the single word “minimalism.”

Pay no attention to the man in the ski mask who is walking toward you. Surely there is a simple explanation, given that the room temperature of sixty degrees could be considered cold if you are a reptile.

Do not under any circumstances engage with the girl in the first row who is an eye roller. Tell yourself things could be worse; she could be sticking a finger down her throat.

Ignore the large man in the front row who is eating a monstrous, dripping sandwich that reeks of eye-stinging onions and that he masticates into submission until there is only a tiny bite left and that—seeing you glare at him—he gestures toward you to share.

Tell yourself that you are a professional and that the furious texting by the entire second row is not a comment upon your performance and simply indicates that such individuals are accomplished multitaskers who no doubt are also exceptional at thumb wars.

When you glance up do not be disappointed and lose your place because the lovely, smiling young woman in the third row, whom you were absolutely sure was your ideal listener, has gone over and stood next to the man in the ski mask and they are both writing in identical black notebooks and whispering in Russian.

Remember not to speed up because you fear you’re losing your audience’s attention during the long section that for verisimilitude sake lists every Greek god from the first seven chapters of The Iliad. You knew this would test your listeners’ patience and you are glad that though several of them have clapped their hands over their ears, the majority have demonstrated their stunned appreciation by the slackness of their jaws and their lolling tongues.

Spit out that word hibernaculum that gave you such trouble when you were rehearsing it. Let it roooolll off the palate with the sonorous joy that you first heard it in your head. It goes well with the fire alarm that has just sounded.

Take a moment to relax and center yourself while your host explains that it is only a false alarm and that there is no need to leave the building despite the shouts of Hallelujah! and the wild stampede by half the audience out the door while the other half have had their exit blocked by your host who is threatening them with a fire hose if they try to leave. All in good fun you are sure.

Remember to read the dialogue with great declamation even though it is a long scene that has no quotation marks and you cannot remember who is speaking. Do not be concerned during this operatic showmanship that your host is literally dragging one member of the audience back to his seat by his ankles.

Pace yourself as you come to the dramatic close of your ninety-three minute reading, raising your voice with grandiloquent, rhetorical flourish to signal you are approaching the end, and then, after your final words, fix your audience with a meaningful stare before saying, “Shall I continue?”

Updating Your Fiction

Really, I don’t remember this being such a problem before. That is, how swiftly things become anachronistic now. I was working on putting together a collection of stories, most of which were written over the past five years. Wait. Did I say “written”? I mean, published. They actually took their sweet time getting published, so that means I wrote some of them much before that five-year period. And that’s the problem: when you’re writing a story, let alone a novel, by the time you finish and, if you’re so lucky, get it published, characters no longer use pay phones, much less call collect when long-distance is included on their cell phones. They no longer do IMing (“Instant messaging is so old,” writes one former user); they might not even be writing blogs, according to a recent news article that stated it’s all about tweets, Skype, and speedier and broader social networking tools now.


So what’s a writer to do? Do you go back and replace all those clunky landlines with cell phones? Somehow put that smartphone in the hands of the character who’s searching in the torrential rain for a pay phone to save his life (marriage, etc.), a frantic quest that you thought gave the scene so much expediency? Why doesn’t he just whip out the ubiquitous cell phone (or borrow one) and text his recipient?


I wish I could say the answer is as simple as ignoring the whole problem. But when I was reading over my stories, any obsolete or dated technology pulled me up short. It’s one thing if the work has already been published and the copyright dates it, but it’s another if enough time has passed to make readers wonder why the story is supposed to be set in the “present,” but markers keep popping up that identify it as the past.


This is not a new question obviously. The writer has always had to take into account such changes. If you started writing a novel before September 11, 2001 and have the World Trade Center in your story, and intend the narrative to be current, then you’re going to bump most of your readers out of the narrative. If you mention a TV show or movie, and that show or movie is long gone, do you worry about it dating the work? Not necessarily, especially if the mention has thematic significance. Or maybe they’re watching cable. Readers often will provide their own explanation for the outdated. If the usage is arbitrary, however, then why not find a more current replacement, just to keep ahead of the game. Does your character, originally conceived pre-hurricane, really need to be named Katrina?


Though fiction has to reflect that it’s “of its time,” the challenge is how long that time lasts exactly. Writers, unless they’re composing a work set in a definite period (or you’ve decided to date or arrange your work in order of publication, say, for a volume of collected stories), usually want an unspecified time period to suggest the “timeless present.” The writer, oblivious to the future, conceives of it not as a retrospective work but as a contemporaneous one with the urgency of the now. It’s when one goes back and rereads the manuscript from the beginning a couple years later that you realize some of that urgency of the intended time period—the unresolved issues of the day; the pressing cultural, social, scientific questions—has gone slack and no longer imbues the fiction with the same immediacy. The question then becomes how much you can—or should—do about it.


One has to consider that in the course of writing the story, certain decisions were made that aligned with the narrative as a whole, not just for its time period. And tinkering too much too update the work can make it self-conscious in a way that sacrifices wholeness for relevance. The greater good may be served by just accepting the story in its entirety as a product of the original forces that conceived it.


On the other hand, if no harm will be done, nothing is wrong with being flexible and performing some due diligence and going through the manuscript to revise with an eye for keeping it as current as possible. If you have teenage characters (or anyone under twenty-five), it’s more than likely they won’t exclusively be having conversations on the phone; they’ll be texting. If you have a character repeatedly asking directions, you’ll really have to wonder if they’ve heard of MapQuest or have activated that GPS app on their phone or why they’re not using an iPad-plutonium, since now, in the year 2020, when you finally get the book published after working on it for ten years, laptops have gone the way of the IBM Selectric. Of course, you can go overboard, as I said, to the point it just sounds as if all the updating is contrived, like bad product placements. You can only retrofit so much into the context of a work that just isn’t meant to accommodate the newfangled. And in that case, it’s best left alone, letting the reader just accept the work as written, proudly (or defiantly) standing up for itself in its own time.


I’m sure others have their own experiences with this issue (poets?), so comments are welcomed.

Nine Signs You're a Neurotic Writer

You subscribe to eight journals but only read the contributor notes when they come.

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You are on page 50 of the first draft of your novel but have rewritten the opening sentence 60 times.

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You write an angry letter to the editor who has held your story, essay, or poem for six months without a response. Then delete it and decide you will call instead. You decide a phone call is too uncomfortable for you, so you rewrite the e-mail. You decide to reread the story, essay, or poem before you send the e-mail. You further decide the editor is right even though you have never heard from him. It’s shit. You get up the next day, rewrite the e-mail, threaten silently to send it, and then delete it. You reread the story, essay, or poem again. You can’t admit to anybody how much time you've wasted doing this.

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Your author’s photo for the planned first novel, of which you are still stuck on page 50, is now four years old. You had it taken, well . . . in anticipation and just because you looked so really good that day. You spend the morning talking on the phone to your best friend about whether you should update the photo or not. “Do you think it still looks like me?”
“Have you finished the—“
“Never mind,” you say, cutting her off. And hang up.

*

You send an e-mail to yourself convinced that those same editors you are mad at have failed to contact you because your server is down. When your e-mail goes through, you delete it, and then stare at the empty space.

*

Your spouse, partner, child asks you, So what have you been up to today? and you answer, “What’s the point? What’s the goddamn point! Fine, you want me to quit, is that it! Okay, I quit, satisfied now? Are you goddamn satisfied? You want blood? Is that what you want? I’m fucking slicing my arm right now. Happy? Happy?”

*

You have an idea. You will read aloud the first fifty pages of the novel that you are stuck on and finally determine whether it’s worth ever finishing. You close your office door so no one will hear you, stand at your desk, pick up the first page, and commence reading in a strong voice. Suddenly it hits you. You know what’s wrong. You sit down and rewrite the opening sentence for the 61st time and never make it to page two.

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One day, after checking your e-mail, you see a message with a subject line of your story’s title. You click hurriedly and the first word is “Congratulations.” You read on. Your story has been accepted for the next issue. They are very pleased to have it and thank you for sending it—they are thanking you! Proofs will be sent, and as stated they are paying forty dollars per published page. You’d given up on ever hearing from the editor after composing daily e-mails to him that you never sent. This is by far your best publication yet! The very motivation you need to get past page 50 on your novel. No one can deny the prestige of this publication. You go online to post your good news on Facebook. You see that someone you know from graduate school has just had a story accepted by The New Yorker. You cannot believe how disappointed you feel.

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You get over your disappointment and write the editor a gushing thank you note. You tell him what it means to be published in his amazing, wonderful, venerable journal and how you never thought you’d ever have a story in such a good journal. You thank him again, promise to send your contributor note that you will spend two days writing and say once more how delighted you are. Then you add a P.S. It is only a small P.S. and will not take up much room in your otherwise grateful thrilled stunned message thanking him.
P.S. Would you mind reading the first sentence of my novel and giving me your opinion . . .

Henry James Makes the Leap

Henry James is not the first author I would insist someone read (that would be Chekhov). As an undergraduate I’d read The American, The Turn of the Screw, Daisy Miller, and The Beast in Jungle, among some other works. And I became a convert. If you were interested in psychological realism, as I was then, James was your man. In graduate school, I read more, but Wings of the Dove did me in. It was to be the last James novel I read for many years, confounded by or just plain impatient with, for me, its unprofitable density, questionable structure, and tedious pacing. Of course some of this is what you sign up for when reading Henry James, and some of it in Wings of the Dove was James out Jamesian himself. I made it through, however, wrote my twenty-page paper, and didn’t go back.

Until recently. On a binge of reading classics I had neglected, The Brothers Karamazov, Moby Dick, Great Expectations, I thought, why not. Let’s visit the master again and see if I can renew my initial idolatry before I turned on the great man. I chose to look at A Portrait of a Lady, one of his most celebrated works of his early period.

I’m still a bit of the school that agrees with H. G. Wells, who in his satirical novel Boon compared James’ prose style to that of a hippopotamus trying to pick up a pea in a corner. But once you get by that and say to yourself, well, it’s sort of interesting that a hippo can do this, you come away marveling at the intricacy of the prose, the sweep and sheer multitude of the characterizations, and the depth of feeling for an entire other continent—Europe—that goes into this book. As a writer, you also come away with a great appreciation for how much James instinctively knew about craft, especially the permutations of point of view.

One movement—and I mean that almost as one would in composing a symphony—struck me in particular. It occurs in Chapter 36. After intensive efforts by several men to marry her, Isabel Archer, the novel’s very central character (more about this in a moment), chooses Gilbert Osmond. Up until this point, the novel has completely revolved around her and her somewhat obscure intentions. Everybody falls in love with this woman and admires her intelligence, charm, grace, beauty, compassion, education, cleverness, humility, and many other appreciable assets. The men want to marry her, the woman want to have a hand in who does, and yet Isabel Archer has undisclosed, almost ineffable reasons for not cooperating, much to the chagrin of the crowd of her admirers who all believe they have her best interests at heart. When she finally does choose Osmond, wrongly as it turns out, we see and learn relatively little of why she does so, considering how James can expound on motivation.

It should be noted that up until this moment, which takes us into chapter 36 of the novel’s 55 chapters, we never stray far from our focus on Isabel, even if we depart from her point of view. The novel is simply all her. It’s called A Portrait of a Lady, but it might as well have been entitled Isabel in the eponymous fashion of Emma Bovary, Emma Woodhouse, and Ann Karenina.

Perhaps James, in the convention of Victorian stories, could have wrapped up the novel with Isabel’s marriage to Osmond. But of course that’s not what he’s after. Questions of destiny and freedom must be played out in the novel long beyond whom Isabel chooses to marry. The challenge is, and it’s one that confronts anyone trying to write a novel that having fulfilled its trajectory at midstream has little use for continuing as is, how to keep the story growing. Isabel has chosen; she’s no longer available; our involvement over whom or if at all she will marry and what her recondite reasons are for doing so or not—after all, she’s not seeking the usual ends of fortune or position in society—have expired. Now what?

And James does what is so necessary but so difficult: he “resets” or restarts his novel. That is, he seeds a narrative path whose beginnings have been stubbed out earlier and will now take a lead in the novel.

When Chapter 36 opens, a number of years have passed. In the interim Isabel has married Osmond. But James doesn’t focus immediately on their marriage or on, as he’s done, Isabel. Instead we get a scene of Madame Merle talking with a gentleman, Ned Rosier, whom we’ve only had the faintest acquaintance with and who wants to marry, we eventually learn, Pansy, the daughter of Osmond and stepdaughter now of Isabel. What’s marvelous about the scene as a transitioning device is that we become completely caught up in this present action. After all, the last time we’ve seen Pansy she was a shy young girl with convent training who had rather lackluster attributes to offer any suitor, especially compared to the elegant, consummate Isabel. We’re dying to know what’s happened to Isabel during these intervening years. Her place in the novel has been hitherto so closely held; we rarely left her side or strayed from a character who wasn’t talking or thinking about her. She’s been in the novel’s consciousness at all times. And now she’s . . . absent. Or suspended.

It’s a bold move, to take her so much out of play and replace her predicament with that of the modest, demure (if fetching in her own way) Pansy’s. But it works. And it works because Pansy revitalizes the novel’s romantic urgency, while placing Isabel offstage for the time being, thereby increasing the mystery about her and our interest in when she will return. In other words, Isabel’s central role is reanimated not by having something momentous happen directly to her or by having other characters continue to discuss her with fascination (enough already), but by having Pansy rise from a secondary position and seize our attention as an unexpected and fresh extension of Isabel’s world. We know Isabel will regain center stage. Soon enough, James will provide a long disquisition bursting at the seams with expository revelations about her unhappy marriage. But at this junction we’re almost relieved to break out of the continual orbit we’ve been in with her and have Pansy’s predicament bear some of the narrative load.

When the shift is made, it's not only to get attention off of Isabel, take a breather from her and the now familiar pattern of her behavior, "reset" things, but to begin the triangular forces between Pansy, her father, and Isabel that will limn the difficult issues of Isabel's marriage. In other words, the situation has to have complex enough potential aside from its own sake and to exert changes on the novel's protagonist. A very simple way to put this is that if Pansy doesn't matter to Isabel on some vital emotional level then the bridge will never be made back to Isabel's story. You might have all sorts of plot intersections but that won't matter unless Pansy's fate is tied up with Isabel's at some junction.

On the other hand, in more contemporary novels, these separate subplots often work more by association than by cause and effect. That is, thematic resonances may play out in parallel stories that don't have to intersect in the way one would expect from a more traditional novel. And I think the contemporary reader's expectations of how much "intersection" is necessary are different. Contemporary readers are used to discreet and even remote narrative lines that parallel rather than intersect or create a concomitant effect that feels resolved in its variations on a theme. Think of Borges, Calvino, and any modernist writer, including Faulkner in The Sound and the Fury and As I Lay Dying. And very recently, David Mitchell's Cloud Atlas is a pure example of these independent or interrupted story lines that willfully defy a funneling down into a single narrative stream.

Regardless, at some point in writing a novel, you realize you can’t keep doing the same thing. Even if it’s been working. Some major shift has to occur that creates an action in the narrative, or plot, if you will, that continues the original thematic trajectory and conflicts of the novel but doesn’t keep repeating the tactics and tropes. Isabel Archer can only go on so long refusing proposals while serving as James’ model for at least one sort of independent American sensibility, and being more pure of motive than any other character in the novel. James slips our attention away from her but he really doesn’t actually;it’s more as if Isabel is backlighted behind a scrim. You can see her there dimly, make out the outlines of her impending significance, but you’re unaware as to how exactly she will recapture the spotlight. This “shadowing” or silhouetting of Isabel keeps Pansy’s involvement from running away with the story on its own while holding Isabel in the wings.

James must have had a sense, even being Henry James and guilty of the longueurs that can characterize his writing, that his narrative was in danger of Isabel becoming overexposed as a character. Making an abrupt shift to Pansy’s situation takes some of this heat off of Isabel so she can cool down a bit as a character and not be overdone at the wrong time.

The question inevitably arises how many of these resets or shifts should occur in a novel. And the answer of course is as many as it takes. Which means not so many as to be a distraction, and not so little as to have the narrative become monotonous. Diverting our attention from a character or situation that has been so deeply invested in by the author takes a risk. Yet that’s precisely the reason to do so. The author has to sense, before the reader does, when the story might go stale and then make the leap to breathe new and necessary life into the fiction.

The Ten Most Obnoxious Comments a Writer Can Make

I have too much free time.

I’m exhausted from my book tour.

My agent wants me to go on The Daily Show. Should I?

I wish my publicist wouldn’t call so early.

Are stocks still the best way to go for such a large advance?

I got a headache reading over my 23-page contract.

My assistant handles that.

My hand is tired. Would you mind if I use a stamp to sign your book?

I remember what it was like to be rejected.

I can’t remember all my titles.

And (from Antonya Nelson) it's been so difficult after winning the Pulitzer.

That's Private

A word about my father: If there’s anyone I’ve written about directly it would be him, a born salesman who sold furniture for fifty years, working since he was thirteen and taking over as head of the family when his father died. And who called me Stevie all my life, as in Stevie, tell me everything, and then would cut me off after the first sentence with “That reminds me of when I was in Paris!” and launch into his own tale. I remember his reading one of my stories, clearly based on him, slapping the book closed afterward, shaking his head with great mirthful incredulity and proclaiming about the main character, “Can you imagine anyone acting this way!”

There are two kinds of families: those who see themselves in everything you write and those who never do. Fortunately, regarding my father at least, the mirror was always opaque. It affords a great freedom, especially when your material is largely drawn from your family. The other option is to say the hell with it and write about them anyway, under the threat of being disowned or, maybe worse, subjected to their hard, enduring silence, as if you were not an author but the family exhibitionist.

Joyce Carol Oates, who’s received her share of criticism for using—some would say exploiting—the tragedies of real people in her fiction, writes in the New York Times that it’s a murky issue ethically and legally as to who has the right to publish private letters. Oates cites the case of Robert Lowell who included intimate letters from his ex-wife, Elizabeth Hardwick, in a book of his poems. When asked what gave him the right to do this without her permission, Lowell responded, “Why not say what happened?” Oates goes on to warn “that anyone who confides in any writer risks being transmogrified into art if he or she is sufficiently interesting. The best protection,” she advises, “is to be dull, bland, and predictable.”

But when exactly does a private experience become a public fact? At what point does the private boundary protecting the material dissolve?

About six months ago I gave a reading of a story that used some facts, and I mean the straight facts, about an accident that was fatal for a colleague’s wife. My colleague, Dick, and his wife had been driving to their family farm in Nebraska from Colorado when they were hit broadside by another car driven by an elderly lady. My colleague’s car overturned and in the immediate aftermath, while they were upside down, still in their seat belts, he asked his wife if she were okay and she answered, “I don’t think so.” Those were her last words.

There was another detail I used: Because the car was totaled and their luggage along with it, Dick, who was staying in a motel across from the local hospital, had to wash the clothes he’d been wearing in the motel room sink, wring out the blood, and put them back on again. I didn’t hear these facts from Dick directly but they were well known within the department.

At the reading I knew it wasn’t a good sign when one of my closest friends, a colleague, too, left immediately afterward and didn’t contact me until a few days later to say he was upset about my using the details of Dick’s wife’s death in the story; he felt the story didn’t rise to the appropriate level of seriousness to justify using such intimate and tragic details. It would have been easy, my colleague pointed out, to change these facts about the accident.

But that’s the point: it would have been too easy if not right, right for me, that is.

The fact is I was very affected by what happened to Dick and his wife. I’d known them for years and like everyone felt great affection for them. But Dick was an English professor, not a geologist as in my story; he didn’t have children as the main character does in my story; and he and Sally were not on the verge of divorce as was the situation for the husband and wife in the story I wrote. So why not change the other “real” details?

Because they’re the very ones that made me believe in the story enough to write it in the first place, the cornerstone of its imagined existence. And of its promise. Put another way: to include those true details is a constant reminder that a person’s life is on loan to you to make use of—good use—as a character. Implicit in that agreement is that the author honors the compact by not blowing the opportunity. Have you trivialized those true details taken? Made fodder of the person’s life for gossip? Extracted only spiteful revenge without redeeming artfulness? Or just as bad, falsely glorified or sentimentalized someone by a poor treatment of the material? Yes, it’s a sort of tacit agreement with the person whose life you use, but it’s a covenant of one, and only the author knows when it’s broken. Though it might seem like stubbornness, my insistence on keeping the actual details are a footprint of the world the story came from and a lasting mark for me of its necessity to exist.

The question arises, of course, why didn’t I show Dick the story first before I published it? Chances are he would have given his approval. Was it because I feared he wouldn’t like it? Be offended? Threaten to sue? I didn’t show him the story for the reason I don’t check with anyone before I write something: If I did, I’d be wanting preapproval. But fiction doesn’t work like that; there are no guarantees that it will be acceptable, and to seek such assurances out in advance is to deceive oneself about the difficulty of the work ahead. Writing with someone’s okay in mind places you in the position of having made a bargain with an outsider. No matter how much you try to put that person out of your mind—and your writing—he or she will become an unseen influence, a faux collaborator, a silent colluder. I have to put myself, my family, and my friends on the line every time I sit down to write. And I have to determine each time whether “it’s worth it”—those three nagging words—to those I might harm, offend, or embarrass in the process. Any writer telling you otherwise is lying to himself.

The answer will never be easy. Some people, such as my father, no matter how much you cull directly from their lives, never will be troubled. Others never forget or forgive the invasion of their privacy. Perhaps, though, it’s not so much invasion as distortion that bothers people when it comes to fiction. With nonfiction, people often resent the sheer naked exposure of themselves. But in fiction, it’s more, So that’s what you think of me! The mousy face; the dirty, limp hair; the purple-veined nose. And my dog is not fat and he doesn’t have an overbite! In fiction perception is character and makes no attempt to be otherwise objective. So the question and challenge in fiction becomes how successful the writer is at freeing the character from the person. If there turns out to be on balance more person than character, then you’ve shortchanged both the writing and the individual whose life you’ve appropriated.

Yes, I could have changed the specifics of the accident, not made it happen in Nebraska, not had Dick washing his bloody clothes out in the sink, substituted instead parallel facts—after all these true details amounted to only a couple hundred words at the most out of the seven thousand in the story—but these “actual” details were the very ones that gave me permission to write the story. That is, the permission to write about anything, whether it be another’s gender or race or history, your family secrets, the illness your child almost died from, any of the tender, difficult, and personal subjects, this permission comes not from the outside but from oneself.

I’m not sure what that appropriate level of seriousness a work of fiction has to reach to justify using someone else’s tragedy. Who of course is to be a judge? You can’t worry about any of this as a writer or you’ll never write a lick of anything from another’s life that’s become personal to you. Something about that life holds something vital and precipitating for you as a writer, and there may be no way to excuse it other than to say Thank you, I apologize, Vaya con dios, and Please contact my lawyer. Invading one’s privacy in writing is a very complicated issue. Families are ripped asunder for such actual or perceived transgressions. But all writers committed to the process have to wrestle with the question of using the lives of others and deciding whether they can live with choices that offend more than please, risk being misunderstood more than celebrated, and justify themselves only to themselves.